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pooh_collector) wrote2014-09-15 05:00 pm
pooh_collector) wrote2014-09-15 05:00 pm
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Meme: DVD Commentary
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elrhiarhodan, angelita26 and embroiderama.
Go to my Masterlist (or AO3 page) and pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted will be very helpful). Alternatively, you can randomly pick a number from 1 to 27, my fic as numbered my AO3 account page. Be advised my AO3 is missing some of the fic you can find on my LJ Masterlist.
I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track. You can ask me anything - character motivation, writing process, or if you disagree with the direction I took in a story, ask me to defend it.
elrhiarhodan, angelita26 and embroiderama.Go to my Masterlist (or AO3 page) and pick a passage from my stories, up to 500 words, and comment to this post with that selection (including a link to the story being excerpted will be very helpful). Alternatively, you can randomly pick a number from 1 to 27, my fic as numbered my AO3 account page. Be advised my AO3 is missing some of the fic you can find on my LJ Masterlist.
I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the story, awful puns [perhaps], and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track. You can ask me anything - character motivation, writing process, or if you disagree with the direction I took in a story, ask me to defend it.
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I wanted to show the tension between Peter's desire to be there for Neal and his discomfort with their relationship with Elizabeth missing. Peter absolutely loves Neal, but he needs to get El back and he can't help feeling that his feelings for Neal are something of a distraction from that goal. As if in this one instance he's being disloyal to his wife by spending any time with their lover.
I think this scene shows Peter's gentle concern and love for Neal, while also, like you pointed out, gives Peter an opportunity to end the estrangement that he doesn't take.
And, poor Neal is pretty sad and pathetic at this point in the story, which makes it that much more emotionally compelling for me when Peter can't give Neal what he needs.
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And, poor Neal is pretty sad and pathetic at this point in the story, which makes it that much more emotionally compelling for me when Peter can't give Neal what he needs.
Yes! You definitely showed that with this scene--the push and pull inside of Peter and Neal's utter miserableness. ♥
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If you're interested sapphire asked me about a different scene in this fic below, which I just responded to.